song by daroker510 aka c rak

well, just saying break it down and doing a breakdown are 2 different things.

Lulz. You can learn from Kimi. You can learn more from me but Kimi knows some things.

MarathonMan wrote:

Lulz. You can learn from Kimi. You can learn more from me but Kimi knows some things.

i edit it

What did you edit?

i took off the uhs in the beggining and replaced it with yeah

i made this poem like in 5 minutes i dont know how the subject of it came along

i can do so much when your not in sight
all these sensless fights
hopefully end tonight
pretending they dont exist and what i need to find
when im losing my grip all thses thoughts in my mind
feeling all this fear that could make me cry
you could kill me now im not begin for my life
it aint nothing much but a emotional ride
cause everyday i want to comit suicide
i believe in miracles so jesus christ
you could let me lose im not grabbing on you tight
for my life
i cant handle anymore stress
you could do it anytime im not afraid of death

heres another one i made like earlier just for fun
but why do all my poems always have something deep?

give me awhile to get my life on track
cause karma hit me for what i did in my past
got stabbed in the back
for the thing that i did
karma hold back because i was a kid
now that im older and i ease the pain
karma came back in a different way
friends so far away ill never get them back
there hatred thoughts of me slowly just stack
i try to hide the pain that i feel inside
if i had one wish i would try to rewind
everything i did to hurt someone else
cause im feeling all the pain that those people felt
i had enough and i dont know what to do
cant handle the things that its putting me through

Hmm it's nice

X-Raider wrote:

Hmm it's nice

omg someone actually posted a comment on my poem omg and you liked it omg

why is it that nobody ever bothers to read my songs?

I read them, i just dont comment on them.

but ya are sopose to motivate me to keep writting them and shit just like how ya motivate darkness

Don't you motivate darkness enough by saying "still raw?"

yes i dothat telling him that hes still good and to keep working on his raps

cool

this song is a story i made up in rap form its to the beat of that inturlude in part of me please rate KENJI inspird me to make it dont know why..and for the record this was the 1st rap i ever made


verse 1

one day there was this boy in this gang
he thought robbing things with them was a blast
then then they told him to start doing drugs
he actually did..then he started to spit out blood
cause he couldnt handle the preasure
so he tried to get himself back together
so he tried to get away then they chased afterhim
then they
asked him wHY YOU TRYING TO LEAVE?
and he said cause i wanna quit smoking weed
the next day he saw this man
that looked like his dad
and he was getting sorounded by a gang
in the parking lot
and he got shot
it was him his words were about hate
it was to late
and they ran away
and he felt so afraid


CHORUS
one day everything has to end
like all the memories that people have left
so try your best
dont be like the rest
you dont wanna be crying in your bed
so be strong
and just be brave
and why do you live in this memory of pain
dont take the blame
its not your fault that everything else is not the same


VERSE 2
the next day he looked at his dads grave
him ans his mom were wyping tears away
and when they went insdie there house
theses people bashed in the doors written in the walls in the floor
YA NOT WELCOMED ANYMORE
so they looked down
they heard a sound
and it came from the kitchen
before he checked his mom was like listen
no matter what happens ill be right here
so go along and have no more fear
so he went when he came back his mom was dead
and then somebody left a note and it said
that i stabbed ehr in the neck
so he got on knees
and he was like GOD PLEASE
just tell me the awnser
am i going to be on my own
or does this mean that ill be all alone


CHORUS
one day everything has to end
like all the memories that people have left
so try your best
dont be like the rest
you dont wanna be crying in your bed
so be strong
and just be brave
and why do you live in this memory of pain
dont take the blame
its not your fault that everything else is not the same

meh. Don't rhyme too much.

that was my 1st song i ever wrote and i was in the 7th grade

well anyways i gotta work harder

lol