lets see....


the good things
1.awsome lyrics very well thought
2.good vocabulay
3.words used very nice


the bad things
1.doesnt rhyme much
2.over used of the word of DEMAND!
3.it feels like its talking to me...

so ill give it a 3 out of 5

ITS GOOD BUT NOT RAW

It IS talking to you... as a listener...


Note, this is VERY suggestive...it's for my gf >.>

-Shadow-
The shadow,
plays along your skin,
it taps every curve,
every sin,
it moves with you,
delayed only by light,
damn you are just outta sight!
I feel my body begin to sweat,
I only hope you're as wet,
and I can only take a sec,
before I step,
to the rythme of your beat,
and take a seat,
on the lust train,

I never knew,
I could be drawn to you,
coulda been next to you,
bumpin right along side you,
I just never knew,
all the things you do,
coulda had me tied to you,
I think I'm inlove with you,
baby...

The world seems lost,
in the darkest of thoughts,
my eyes they see,
nothing but your lovley being,
I can only percieve,
the hips and curves of your feminimity,
you are so extrordenary,
your eyes they lure my soul,
into a dark silky hole,
keeping my tightly held,
I feel like I'm gonna melt...

I never knew,
I could be drawn to you,
coulda been next to you,
bumpin right along side you,
I just never knew,
all the things you do,
coulda had me tied to you,
I think I'm inlove with you,
baby...

<tbc?>

So nice and beautiful

lets see


the good things
1.beutiful lyrics
2.good poem to tell your girlfriend
3.seems like EFFORT
4.this would make her love you even more
and
5.I LIKE IT


the bad things...
1.coulda rhymed a little better
but it wouldnt matter to her cause she loves you and she would be very lovable to you cause you deticated a song to her

for a poem to a girl
ill would give it a 4.5/out of 5
its good
shell like it
and you would get her very sprung hehehe

I flex and she gets... well, ya... I thought sprung was slang for a certain male organ getting long'n'hard, since it's like the term "It sprung from the ground." as in a plant growing from the ground to become stiff and long... like a certain male organ... but w/e

dude wtf are you thinking hahaha

that's kinda creepy... but considering I'm listening to Closer By Nine Inch Nails right now, I shouldn't be talking.

lol hisashis scared

*LINK DELETED FOR BEING TOO SCARY*

Lol you would be too...

what is your malfunction boy?

lol I hated that song.

wtf were they smoking when they made that video??

I didn't watch the video... can't imagine wat it was like...

they showed people in blood and they were almost naked and it was like some of that exersict sh1t

Oh shit! delete link!

Did I just say shit? I never say shit.